17A
The feedback I was given was very encouraging. Many people liked the uniqueness of my business plan. This gave me confidence in knowing that is not just myself that thinks this is a good idea worth exploring. In addition, they commented on my hand motions reflecting that I was genuinely enthusiastic about my plan. However, there was a suggestion to describe a little more about the revenue versus the expenditures. I made sure to add more details about that this time around. I was lucky enough to be given all great pieces of feedback that I can implement into my pitch that will make it improve. What I chose to change is add a section dedicated to explaining where revenue comes from and what the main expenditures are. To stay around the 90-second mark I had to shorten the attention grabber. I originally ask four questions but now I ask only three.